Jack the Monkey

[JACK THE MONKEY]

JACK THE MONKEY




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[/b]: Jack
SURNAME: None
ALIAS: Jack the Monkey
TITLE: None

AGE:
AFFILIATION: Pirate
BRANDED?: No
RANK: None
SHIP: Black Pearl

࿂ DESCRIBE YESELF![/color]
Well I’m a monkey. A capuchin monkey in fact. I’m less than a foot tall and weigh at most 2 lbs. I have brown eyes and brown and white fur. My fur is soft and silky, but there are only a few people I let pet me: Barbossa and females. I wear monkey-sized clothes. I have brown eyes. I know that most people think that I am just a pet. That is only partly true.

࿂ WHAT GIVES YE PLEASURE?
I like Barbossa. He’s nice to me and saved me from abusive merchants. I like gold, or anything shiny for that matter. I like to steal, a lot. I like to annoy Jack Sparrow, whom I was named for. I like rum, which is totally Sparrow's fault.

࿂ WHAT MAKES YE ANGRY?[/color]
I dislike Jack Sparrow. Well more like I find him as annoying as I'm sure he finds me. I also hate water. I'm not a strong swimmer, so I would most likely drown. That is if I could die. I hate snakes. I suppose that comes from an inherent dislike for a natural perdator. I hate anything and anyone Barbossa hates. He's my all. I dislike being laughed at.

࿂ WHAT DO YE HIDE?[/color]
I fear disappointing Barbossa. He is the only person that truly matters to me. I look up to him. I regret being cursed, sometimes. Though it is fun being Immortal. My secret is that I have killed people before and didn’t like it.

࿂ WHAT SKILLS DO YE POSSES?[/color]
I’m excellent at stealing. I’m small so I can get into place others can’t. I have pretty decent aim. I’m not very strong considering I’m a monkey. I can’t talk but I can get my point across, well usually.

࿂ HOW DO YE ACT?[/color]
I’m extremely loyal to Barbossa. As I've said before, he is the only one I truly like. I am very intelligent for a monkey. Though I can't talk, I can figure out puzzles and such. I am rather rash. I do things without thinking them through. I am impulsive. I can be very affectionate and like to have affection placed upon me. Though usually only by Barbossa. I’m fairly obedient, but mostly to Barbossa. I’m easily bribable. I’m also tend to be easily distractible. I must ADHD or something. I tended to be rather impish. There's nothing better I like to do than to play tricks on people, especially Jack Sparrow. I’m also a bit of a pyromaniac. What can I say, fire is cool.

࿂ WOULD YE BE MISSED?[/color]
Well there’s Barbossa. He’s my master. I don’t know if I have any family. So really all I have is Barbossa.

࿂ YER STORY![/color]
The first part of my life was actually rather traumatic. Merchants captured me when I was a baby. They treated me horribly. Barbossa bought me a few years ago and I’m eternally grateful to him.
I was not around when the crew stole the cursed treasure of Cortez. But I ended up being cursed any way. I helped them reverse the curse. When Will Turner broke the curse, I stole a coin and so am still cursed.

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23 ࿂ MONKEY ࿂ ONE YEAR [spelled out]
BECCA

RP SAMPLE. <3

Jack wasn’t sure what to do. All he knew was that Barbossa was gone. He felt lost without him. Jack Sparrow was annoyed by him and threatened to shoot him on several occasions. Jack pouted at no one in particular. He saw that Gibbs was asleep and maybe still had some rum in that flask. Rum would help him with this sadness. That’s why people drank right? Jack suddenly grinned. Maybe being small, cute, and immortal had its upsides.
He snuck over to where Gibbs was snoring. He glanced around quickly and saw no one was paying attention to him. He reached towards the flask and was about to grab in when he suddenly was up in the air upside-down. He looked and saw that Jack Sparrow had him up by his tail. He glared at Sparrow and hissed at him.
Sparrow glared back and then flung him against the side of the ship. Jack didn’t like that at all. He flew at Sparrow with his fangs bared. But before he got very far he stopped. He remembered why he wanted rum and sat down and started to cry, pitifully. The crew didn’t quite know what to do with this crying monkey so they stood there for a second and then awkwardly went back to what they were doing.

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[GENEVIEVE MARTIN]

As much as I love the fact you're taking Jack, you need to extend the detail in your profile a lot more. Each section requires at least 2 paragraphs each (8-10 sentences). If you can extend the detail, we will be more than happy to accept you.

[JACK THE MONKEY]

I would appreciate any pointers you can give me for how to improve him. I really would love to play him. Having a character who can't talk is going to be an interesting challenge for me.

[GENEVIEVE MARTIN]

I know there isn't a lot to describe abotu him, but you still need to extend the details into an at least bigger paragraph in each section. It's just not enough information to approve of...

When you describe his personality, go into quirks and activities he likes to do.
When you describes his looks, talk about how his fur feels and how he thinks everyone around him sees him.
When you describe his fears, go into reasons why those would BE his fears. The problem with your application is that all the details are way too short. You just list them off like you would a grocery list. Go into detail. Describe it like you're trying to give someone a perfect picture of who you are.

[JACK THE MONKEY]

Is that better?

[AMAYA O' HIERLIHY]

In my opinion, i think this is just fine. Because Jack The Monkey isn't focused on too much and ultimately is a monkey, it wouldn't be fair for us to ask more than this from you. This is great! The only thing you could expand on is why he'd miss Barbossa. just a sentence more or so. I've never seen an application for the Monkey before. I say APPROVED.

[GENEVIEVE MARTIN]

I agree. :]